Spellbound (haiku)

Albert Edelfelt, Virginie
Albert Edelfelt, Virginie


I must have loved you

before, in some other life

Under this same moon


You have me entranced

A deer caught in the headlights

Possessed, body and soul


When you say my name

My heart is yours to command

You have me spellbound





4 thoughts on “Spellbound (haiku)

  1. I like the way you have done these–stringing haikus together like this to build a fuller poem. Is there actually a name for this type of structure? The way this starts out I am reminded of a poem by Rabindranath Tagore, I believe it may be from “The Gardener.” I may be wrong; I have so much poetry hoarded, but it reminds me of this one:

    Unending Love

    I seem to have loved you in numberless forms, numberless times
    In life after life, in age after age, forever.
    My spellbound heart has made and remade the necklace of songs,
    That you take as a gift, wear round your neck in your many forms,
    In life after life, in age after age, forever.

    Whenever I hear old chronicles of love, it’s age-old pain,
    It’s ancient tale of being apart or together.
    As I stare on and on into the past, in the end you emerge,
    Clad in the light of a pole-star piercing the darkness of time:
    You become an image of what is remembered forever.

    You and I have floated here on the stream that brings from the fount.
    At the heart of time, love of one for another.
    We have played along side millions of lovers, shared in the same
    Shy sweetness of meeting, the same distressful tears of farewell-
    Old love but in shapes that renew and renew forever.

    Today it is heaped at your feet, it has found its end in you
    The love of all mans days both past and forever:
    Universal joy, universal sorrow, universal life.
    The memories of all loves merging with this one love of ours
    And the songs of every poet past and forever.

    Rabindranath Tagore

    Nevertheless, I like the way you have “linked” these haikus. I may have to try this; short poetry seems to be my forte.

    Thank you.

    1. I absolutely love Rabindranath Tagore! This poem especially is profoundly beautiful!
      I love haikus! To be able to say so much in such few words is not always an easy task, but one I enjoy immensely. I actually did some research to make sure I was not breaking any literary rules and it appears that yes you can do extended haikus. I suppose there will be poets who disagree, but when did poetry become about sticking to the rules;)

      I look forward to seeing some of your work:)


      1. I can never keep the Japanese forms straight. but I believe you’re right. I was one of the poetry editors of my colleges online journal last fall and did some research on all the Japanese forms and I do believe you can treat them as verses, but I don’t remember if there was a specific name for using that structure.

        I could refer to my notes but that might take some doing. I’ve been collecting notes on forms for years. I major in English Literature and Creative Composition, hence my blog has been dormant for quite some time. My goal was to be an editor but I’m having second thoughts. I think I would rather tutor; I tutored Creative Writing last spring after my professor told me I shouldn’t be taking classes I think I can teach.

        So be it.

        I don’t necessarily write forms; an occasional sonnet perhaps, but I generally write in a neo-Elizabethian style because I cut my poetic teeth on the Romantic and Victorian poets. I need to break that mold. I’ve been trying to read more of the Modernists now and find a different voice.

      2. I did not realize you were an adept in literature and writing. I really have no formal training in writing other than I read quite a bit and am married to a writer. I have found that I have a natural affinity for verse and have just kind of run with it. I did take a creative writing class in college, but never anything formal in poetry.
        I would love to pick your brain sometime:) You could probably give me some good pointers. I’ve ordered some books on haiku actually as I do enjoy writing it.

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